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IN THE SHADOWS OF NOVEMBER -S1 E1- FROM OUT OF THE CLOUDS
By Bill Albert
On November 9th 25 nuclear bombs got off across the United States. There were supposed to be 26 but one person hid it. She just can't remember where.
SYNOPSIS:
This series follows a mysterious woman named November as she travels across a post-apocalyptic United States. The world is in chaos, the government scattered across the country, paramilitary group given unlimited power, and many people adjusting to a world where rules don't apply anymore. As she travels she uncovers more clues as to the true origins of the attacks and a battle for control of the new world order begins.
IN THE SHADOWS OF NOVEMBER -S1 E1- FROM OUT OF THE CLOUDS
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This has some really rad potential, Bill! I do think that it would be helpful to have at least an idea of why these nuclear bombs were (detonated right? That should maybe be a touch clearer, as well) in the first place. Right now, it almost feels like the bombs existed just to stir up trouble, but if they're nuclear bombs, and there are 26 of them ... ...that's a pretty cataclysmic kinda thing. Incidentally, we also need to know what kinda person "She" is. These certainly feel like the actions of a full-on psychopath, but we should be told either way, and ESPECIALLY if she's our protagonist. We need to know not only what kind of story we're getting into, but whose lens we're essentially being told that story through (and that lens is our protagonist's). Good start!
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