Hey there, JR! I would love to know more about why/how this teacher becomes an escort because even if she's deeply in debt, that's an incredibly large jump to make. (And how much debt are we talking? Is this $20K of credit card debt, or is she at risk of losing her house?) Relatedly, it would be helpful to know that much more about our protagonist beyond "teacher". What other traits/adjectives could you add that would inform us that much more about who she is and, therefore, both why she makes this decision to become an escort AND what in her might snap so that she'd go full vigilante following an assault?

Interesting start, though!

Hi Angela. Thanks for the feedback. I understand that it's a large jump, and I believe I make it work in the script. Her debt is more than $200k. Loglines are always challenging.

Hi JR. I agree. Loglines are challenging. In my humble opinion to attract more attention I would mention the drastic change of occupation sooner. ie. A teacher becomes an escort........Tis but a thought.

I like it because it's different... Different WINS!

I agree with the occupation issue. Its less likely for a teacher to do that. Why not something like an actor, a makeup artist, etc. so she has the drama potential to do such thing.