Thank you for the feedback, Nick. Very much appreciated. :)

This is a great Logline... up until the clunky end portion.

Clunky? How?

It's laid out so well and reads so smoothly up until the "and a grim, tense struggle unfolds" portion at the end. When reading it aloud, it sounds like a postscript crammed-in as if saying "oh and by the way, this happens". - It's the word AND that pumps the brakes hard, then the two coordinate adjectives that makes it stutter.

You want to keep it clear and short. You don't need the girlfriend (only if she could add something special to the logline) and the reporter. Hey, there's always a reporter. Sure, use him/her in the screenplay, just not in the logline. A try -- JUST a try:

"After a lost Brexit war, a Scottish Robin Hood must carefully choose his friends to take down UK’s Conservative party or face darkness under English rule.

Hi, Stefano Pavone. How about this for a logline: "In a post-Brexit Britain, an honourable vigilante takes on the autocratic Government with help from a crew of fellow outcasts while eluding the trail of a tough, by-the-book cop."

OK, Maurice. I'll give it a try. :) Thank you. :)

You're welcome, Stefano. After reading the synopsis, I think a better logline would be: "In a post-Brexit Britain, an honourable vigilante tries to take down the autocratic Government with help from a crew of fellow outcasts while eluding a tough, by-the-book cop who's on his trail."

I would think you would have to change the government party names due to ease of production as a lot of people like Conservative or Labour. It would also help not to alienate segments of a potential market. A smaller market means less opportunity for money. Also, I would recommend working into the logline of what a 'post-Bretix Britan' looks like. Is it rich or poor? Happy or sad? Power? Right now the phrase left alone is open to interpretation and will be something different to everyone who reads it depending on how they view the political subject. Also, why is there a stormtrooper icon in the poster? If it is a pop-culture reference then it seems misplaced, if not, then I would suggest replacing it with your own design for an army trooper helmet as it is too well know and distracting.

Your logline should have an incident and a solution - I have no idea what your story is which might be the reason you keep getting rejections as you must have a solid logline is the first step!!! Best of luck