A weight management specialist, from Philadelphia, puts building her life with a serious boyfriend and lifelong friends on hold to take a job in a small southern town dying of obesity related illnesses.
I think this has potential. It's a good concept if the script is written well. I'd keep it moving at a fast pace. Keep it full of funny moments. If it moves slow, it could come across as corny.
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When a bariatrician finds herself drowning in student debt, she puts her Philadelphia life on hold to take a job in a small southern town dying of obesity-related illnesses.
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I think this has potential. It's a good concept if the script is written well. I'd keep it moving at a fast pace. Keep it full of funny moments. If it moves slow, it could come across as corny.
This Logline has far too much fat on its muscle in my opinion. My take:
When a bariatrician finds herself drowning in student debt, she puts her Philadelphia life on hold to take a job in a small southern town dying of obesity-related illnesses.
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BA Mason. Thanks for your suggestion. I'm starting to want to cut things down to your suggestion but I want to take out the student debt info.
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