THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES
Post your loglines. Get and give feedback.
REMOTE TWINS
By Karlton Ruffin
A brother fights to win his stolen identity back from his twin.
SYNOPSIS:
A medical doctor/scientist invents a formula to speed pregnancies by 50%, and uses his own pregnant wife as a scapegoat.
After delivering a healthy set of twins after only five months, it is discovered that there was a side effect. The twins' nervous systems were switched between them, and if one should smash his thumb with a hammer, he does not feel it but the other does.
One twin graduates at the top of his class while the other is more nonchalant about life, however he uses his brother's looks, feel, and touch to steal his job and lavish lifestyle. As a result, the well off brother suffers as the two switch positions in life, as he becomes the less fortunate.
He must fight to the finish to gain his life back by finding an antidote for their father's mistake, or live his life in poverty for good!
copyright 2019
Register / Log In
Rated this logline
1 person likes this
You got something original here. Could be fun!! Now use a screenwriting program for the right format. Also cut up your paragraphs.
Thank you for the review and advice! I love that you enjoy the story's concept. will certainly utilize the feedback.
What software would you recommend? I did install Celtx and uploaded the script, but it is all out of format now, and correcting will be pretty much like rewriting the entire script! LOL
Rated this logline
LOVE IT!!!!!
Rated this logline
Hey Karlton, I would use Celtx (I use it too). There are two irritating hick ups though:
(1) I never found the option to underline the Title on the title page in the free version.
(2) If there is not enough room, It cuts up the sentence at the bottom of the page, and puts part of it on the next page.
Yes, it will take a while before you have it in correct Celtx format, but not nearly as much as rewriting.
Rewriting is rethinking, reformatting is...just reformatting.
I guess you can do the job in about then hours.
And working on it again you will find some things you want to change.