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52 GENESIS
By Steve Harrison
Forced together, a Christian narcotics detective and an aimlessly withdrawn civilian have no choice but to fight against police corruption and an intolerant drug dealer's tactics, sinking a city into chaos.
SYNOPSIS:
In Jacksonville-Florida, FRANK HAMES, a detective transferred to narcotics, teams up with detective LEWIS LOPEZ, six months after a drug dealer, RAMONE MATEO was captured. Lewis, being corrupt swirls after shooting another officer. Frank maintains faith in Lewis, but after a shaky drug deal for meth, Frank’s patience burns-out for the dirty job. He gives his Lieutenant notice for resignation. That night his wife TERRESA also agrees his promise to God must be fulfilled.
TED COLEMAN, a drunken loner is late for work. His boss isn’t happy and informs him that the car lot is closing for good. At Ted’s age, bad back, no education, hopelessness sets in. The boss hands Ted money for his grandson, wanting him to deliver it to a school.
Frank and Lewis arrive at the school looking for a teenager. Ted arrives at the front office when Ramone’s men attack. A battle ensues after Ted shoots one of the men. Frank leaves the gym to help. Lewis is shot for messing up the hostage situation. Ted and Frank take down Ramone’s men, protecting the kids. During this diversion, Ramone escapes when his prisoner transport van is intercepted.
Ted ends up in Frank’s custody. They take a detour from downtown to check on a hunch leading them to a HITMAN. A car chase happens with Frank’s car being destroyed and flung off a bridge. God intervenes, saving them with a miracle. Detectives CHRIS RUTHERSON and THOMAS MARCH go on the hunt for Ramone. I.A. COLE changes the plan by charging dead Frank with murder, locking down the narcotics unit, causing CHRIS and THOMAS to become rogue.
Frank gives Ted scripture holding up God’s miracle while finding a way back to the city. Ramone’s wife, LUCIANA and 7-year-old son DANIEL, are taken from a safe-house by the Hitmen. Ramone receives his wife and child. Joining the Hitmen Ramone wants more targets.
Frank learns that Chris and Thomas are wanted. He plans a meet in hopes to arrest them, using Ted as a backup. Chris has the same idea. The tense meet happens with the four. When facts are proven, the fight isn’t with them. Frank learns that Ramone has escaped and looks at a file Chris is carrying. God intervenes again, tying a name in the file with the miracle at the bridge. The four bands together searching down the address and finding Ramone. A battle erupts causing major damage. They take Ramone and his men down securing the wife and child, but the price is bloody for the men saving her.
52 GENESIS
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I think the longline needs to incapsulate the 'why' they are forced together more strongly - and the descriptive of the deceptive being Christian seems forced - it only needs mentioning if it is going to conflict with another part of the longline itself. Seems good - just needs another pass for the longline (not the story necessarily itself)
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Thank you for the advice and hope all is well on your side of the pond. Thanks for taking the time to check this out.
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Thank you for wanting to connect. I read the screenplay today and would love to take part in this. I understand where Paul was coming from, but after reading the script I think you nailed the logline. This is not an average faith film and I didn't want to be associated with it until after reading it. This can give any action movie a run for its money. The school is a bit touchy though!
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Thank you, Mr. Richardson, for the comment. Thanks for reading the script and the feedback! It is a Lethal weapon meets Miami Vice! type screenplay!
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Thanks, Anthony for taking the time out of your day to read it.
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The logline is good. I'm reading the screenplay. Will take time to comment on that.
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Thanks, Harpreet for taking the time to look at it.
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NICE! May I act in this??
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Absolutely! We need a Frank! Can you pilot a souped-up 928 (if allowed to use the Porsche), do you like Def Leppard (if we can get the song rights), can you be in for possible sequels? If so, you may be our Frank. Did you read the script? Choose a character! Disclaimer, you don't have to like Def Leppard or those type of songs and don't have to physically drive a souped-up 928...lol
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Thank you, Teresa, for reading it and the feedback.
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Thank you, Marc, for taking a look and the rating of what you saw.
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Pilot Hayes they can put out Dude where is my Car or alll types of reruines but this has Balls. I've seen everything and don't go to the theater like i used too. I'm in and the music choices rocks if we can get them. What a package if you believe or not
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Thanks, Chrithppp! I know that's a typo just like Thomas vs Thomass. Deliberate yes! Slang is hard to write, but the actors have freedom from what I've been told. Don't paint God in a box or the actors and the etc. You know where this can go. If a comma is the breaking point, then lose some more money! If Dude where Is MY Wallet had perfect writing? Then let's throw bags of lit shat at the wall and see if it sticks!
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Thank you, Nathaniel, for checking the logline and rating it.
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Nice. Who are the characters?
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I'm Chris and your Frank! I'm the one that sneezes in the cell phone lol
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Thank you, Eve. We would love to have you along for the ride.
Thank you Lance for taking the time to read the script and rating it.
William, thank you for taking the time to read through and rating this.
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This is solid and pretty strong.
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