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WHEN DRY LEAVES FALL
By Thoko Zulu

GENRE: Drama, Biography
LOGLINE: A legendary African artist destined for greatness is seduced by the fake charms of a deceptive woman who introduces him to a dark spiritual world with devastating consequences.
Nate Rymer

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Thoko Zulu

Thank you for the rating, Nate!

Eoin O'Sullivan

Hello. You have the genre marked as, documentary, is this correct? Also, I'm not sure if there is a Nobel Prize category specifically for art? There are 6: literature, physics, chemistry, peace, economics, and physiology & medicine. I think you need to hint at why this artist would become so obsessed with the occult, to be led down this path.

Thoko Zulu

Hello you too, Eoin. I think legendary artist would be more appropriate and then dwelve deeper into his achievements and the reasons why he could have been led down this path, which later became an obsession, hence it being categorized as a documentary. Hint why he went down this path cannot be pre emptied, but is evident in recordings when he was still alive. Events during and after his untimely death, point to strong possibilities that he could have been duped to subscribe to the cult. The documentary aims to unveil the devastating truth.

Daniel Duane

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Daniel Duane

I was going to ask why its a doc but if you say it is, it must be. If it wasn't a doc, I was going to say don't give away the ending.

Thoko Zulu

Do you think it could work better as a feature based on a true story? I did initially think about it, knowing the 1 hr wouldn't sufficiently cover all the dramatic events. Thank you for the feedback, much appreciated. I am doing the edit to conceal the ending

Thoko Zulu

Hey, Daniel. Thank you for the rating and feedback.

Tasha Lewis

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Thoko Zulu

Thank you for the rating, Tasha!

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