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Hampered by his Fifth Avenue spiked-heeled wife, a business failure with no common sense and desperate to succeed inherits a run down lodge in a rural town populated by eccentric residents and visited by fanatic fly fishermen, hunters, and UFO chasers who make bets how how long they will last.
SYNOPSIS:
In the tiny Community of Mangas Dam, New Mexico, local patrons of the Tumbleweed Lodge wait for their new owner to appear.
Ben pilots his Beechcraft Bonanza to the local airport only to find that the weed lined airstrip is 2,000 feet above the river. Short on gas, no cell service he has no choice but to hike down to the lodge leaving behind his spike heeled fashionable Fifth Avenue wife (Delilah 20s).
Meanwhile Delilah fears for her life until rescued by Sam Fontaine, the local English lord of the competition, the highly successful and oozing class River’s Edge Lodge. He drives her in style down to the Tumbleweed in time to find Ben staggering in moments later.
Over the course of the next few days, the highly bemused locals take it all in and make bets on how long the city folk will last:
Jesus (Zeus) Ramirez (M 30s) erotically handsome, jack of all trades - fishing guide, cook, mechanic, kiss ass, class clown does imitations of Delilah to entertain the locals.
Rhett Wilson (M 80s) a grizzled no nonsense Korean War Vet cannot abide stupidity. He refers to Mr Bennett as “The fifth” and wonders “How can anyone be that stupid and sober.”
Charlene Brown (F 70s) Chain smoking, oxygen huffing, gravel voiced - calls it like she sees it and pulls no punches.
Jane Joyce (F 20s) Sweet young thing, rather naive, good natured, the glass is mostly full type that gets on your nerves. Morning waitress.
Clementine Jones (F 50s) Sardonic level headed evening waitress. She tries to keep things civilized.
Esther Begaye (F 40s) Navajo Cook. Taciturn philosophical.
Phoebe Lee (F 70s) garrulous dishwasher with a propensity for saying inappropriate things at inappropriate times. Slightly hard of hearing, she says it all too loud.
When Jesus determines the Bennetts should learn to fly fish- a rich man's sport- Delilah hooks Ben, turns the boat over and goes screaming down the river. Later she attacks the fly fisherman who encouraged her to stand up in the three feet of water.
Having locked themselves out of their 80s double wide, a shrewd locksmith installs a new lock on the front door, while the entire community remains silent about the fact that there is no lock at all on the back door. The insult to injury is coupled by the bathtub falling through the floor of the double wide with Delilah in it.
Delilah’s fit and debonair father (Justin Shepherd 50s) shows up to take his “little darlin” back to civilization and he and Ben have a knock down brawl. Sam Fontaine admires Ben’s excellent form and all cheer their new boss while exchanging bets on how long they will last.
The series continues with a variety of fly fisherman, hunters, oil field workers, and UFO chasers who come and go. Bears help themselves, somebody shoots two elk by accident, and worse yet, some idiot takes a mag-buck two days before season. (He had to leave the state) Then there's the BB that jacks up the telephone line, the 12 year old who catches the biggest crappie ever, the house boat resident who was caught by the Government Scuba Diver dumping shit and more excitement. Meanwhile Ben's heart gets in the way of his business acumen, Delilah tries to civilize the community, the locals keep everything grounded and the tourists are unpredictable.
The series continues with a variety of fly fisherman, hunters, oil field workers, and UFO chasers who come and go. Bears help themselves, somebody shoots two elk by accident, and worse yet, some idiot takes a mag-buck two days before season. (He had to leave the state) Then there's the BB that jacks up the telephone line, the 12 year old who catches the biggest crappie ever, the house boat resident who was caught by the Government Scuba Diver dumping shit and more excitement. Meanwhile Ben's heart gets in the way of his business acumen, Delilah tries to civilize the community, the locals keep everything grounded and the tourists are unpredictable.
Hi there, Suzanne! You have a lot of really cool stuff in this logline. I would honestly just think about it streamlining it some.
Really cool concept here. I think the logline is a little dense though. Could probably be paired down a little.
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Thank-you. I thought about "Hampered by his Fifth Avenue spiked-heeled wife, a business failure with no common sense and desperate to succeed inherits a run down lodge in a rural town populated by eccentric residents". but it didn't seem to sparkle.