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After witnessing the murder of his father during a mail coach robbery in 1863, a determined young man hunts down the notorious bushranger responsible and to reclaim a stolen heirloom in a perilous quest for justice and redemption.
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I like the concept, Jeffrey Milne! I think you're almost there with the logline.
Here's a logline suggestion (I put everything in one sentence): "After twelve long years, a Mail Coach driver sets out to avenge his father's murder and retrieve a stolen heirloom from the bushranger responsible, putting his life and future at risk."
You can remove "family" because you put "heirloom."
Thanks for the feedback guys.