Hello Steven, I suggest you to use the template, 'When X (inciting incident) happens, THIS (Adjective/Profession) PERSON needs to Battle/Face/Overcome THIS in order to Active Verb/Goal THIS before/or else THIS occurs.' Another tip, usually there are no names in a logline.

Sorry about this, but I would reather do loglines in my own way. This script is just an episode of my cartoon, where the main 2 characters come onboard to their new Traveling Wizards guild to meet their new friends

"Sorry about this, but I would reather do loglines in my own way." I understand about wanting to do things your own way, Steven Gibson, but producers, production companies, studios, etc. look for certain things in a logline. If you ignore that and do your own thing, it's going to be harder to sell your script.

This script is part of my series, but if you want me to change then fine.

Steven Gibson, for a series, you'll have an overall logline for the series and a logline for each episode (in the first season). The overall logline sums up the series, and an episode logline sums up an episode.

The logline you posted is an episode logline. It's a nice start, but I think it needs a little work. Here's a suggestion for the episode logline: "After completing the Traveling Wizards Guild Exam, Michael and Marinette join the Questful Quails' ship, the Water Quail, and get to know the new friends they meet onboard."

I agree with Marcos Fizzotti about not mentioning names in a logline, but that's more for feature scripts and the overall logline of a series. In a feature script logline and the overall logline of a series, you would write "a _______ (an adjective and the character's title) and a _______ (an adjective and the character's title)..." instead of mentioning names.

Example: In the overall logline for your series, it would be something like: "After ______ (the inciting incident of the series/the event that sets the plot in motion), a reckless teen and his brave best friend _______ (the overall goal of the series) so ________ (the overall stakes of the series)." NOTE: I don't know if Michael is a reckless teen, and I don't know if Marinette is his brave best friend. I'm just using those as examples.

Since the logline you posted is an episode logline, I think it's fine to use names in it (since you would've already put Michael and Marinette's adjectives and titles in the overall logline).