A grieving father, a disillusioned barmaid, a sketchy barman, a newlywed couple, and a sheriff converge in a rural bar during a violent snowstorm, but little do they know only four of them will make it out alive.
Tony S. 1 star? Really? That's not cool. You're not giving Noel a fair shake or a chance to correct whatever (you feel) needs correcting.
Noel, first off. I love the poster! I think you have a good baseline concept, short and to the point, but I can't rate this logline fairly simply because there's no meat on it. Don't hesitate to be a little more descriptive.
Take Identity for example: (Stranded at a desolate Nevada motel during a nasty rainstorm, ten strangers become acquainted with each other when they realize that they're being killed off one by one.)
Or Vacancy: (A married couple becomes stranded at an isolated motel and finds hidden video cameras in their room. They soon realize that unless they escape, they'll be the next victims of a snuff film.)
Thanks for the honest feedback Tony S. obviously you weren't feeling it. I agree with you and Frank Baruch it's kind of bland. Feel free to make any suggestions. I have like three different versions but none of them are perfect. And thanks Billy, we all know how hard loglines are.
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Sounds juicy
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Tony S. 1 star? Really? That's not cool. You're not giving Noel a fair shake or a chance to correct whatever (you feel) needs correcting.
Noel, first off. I love the poster! I think you have a good baseline concept, short and to the point, but I can't rate this logline fairly simply because there's no meat on it. Don't hesitate to be a little more descriptive.
Take Identity for example: (Stranded at a desolate Nevada motel during a nasty rainstorm, ten strangers become acquainted with each other when they realize that they're being killed off one by one.)
Or Vacancy: (A married couple becomes stranded at an isolated motel and finds hidden video cameras in their room. They soon realize that unless they escape, they'll be the next victims of a snuff film.)
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Thanks for the honest feedback Tony S. obviously you weren't feeling it. I agree with you and Frank Baruch it's kind of bland. Feel free to make any suggestions. I have like three different versions but none of them are perfect. And thanks Billy, we all know how hard loglines are.
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New and improved logline! Thanks to Tony S. and @Frank for pushing me to do better. This is what this site is all about!
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Noel, this logline feels like such a great throwback to me and man, I love it so much.
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Noel Thompson You're welcome! This one is so much better than what you originally had. Good work!
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