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ETHEREAL LOVE-WORK IN PROGRESS-UPDATED VERSION
By Beatrice Wong
if you were born with a supernatural condition which seems untreatable, what would you do? /p>
SYNOPSIS:
If you had a 'superpower', would you keep a secret or would you let everyone know? Teddy has lived with a mysterious illness since he was a child that no one could get to the bottom of, not even the most experienced doctors. Allylaine is the love of his life and Ben, his childhood best friend since forever. One competition would change the dynamics of this close-knit threesome and throw their lives into a spin.Â
ETHEREAL LOVE-WORK IN PROGRESS-UPDATED VERSION
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Hey, Beatrice, This looks like an interesting story. I'm afraid I got a little knotted up in the logline, though. Wonder if it would be helped by moving things around and defining the main players?
Something like:
An (ambitious microbiologist?) conceals a mysterious illness while ( a mother, child, friend?) struggle for their lives.
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Thanks, Robin Gregory! I will edit the logline. I was going for a suspense effect but it's obviously not working
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Beatrice Wong , loglines are little beasties, aren't they? I'm sure you'll find that vein soon!