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Ripley, a former Special Forces soldier turned Chief of Police, races against time to catch a serial killer murdering altar boys. She must also fight for her marriage, her sobriety, and a demonic force in her home before it all comes crashing down.
SYNOPSIS:
Ripley Abecassis is former Special Forces newly elected Chief of Police for the city of Boston. Her wife, Siobhan is a successful writer, but is unfulfilled in her marriage. It continues to deteriorate as she seeks attention elsewhere. A serial killer is lurking around Boston killing young altar boys in a ritualist manner. Ripley combats pressure from the Catholic church and in her new post with a lot to prove. The pressure of her crumbling marriage and a failing investigation brings her sanity to a fever pitch and she confronts her own demons as she battles true unknown forces in her home.
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Hi Carmen, I like your concept a lot. Might I suggest tightening this logline a bit:
Ripley, a troubled former Special Forces soldier turned Chief of Police, is on the trail of a serial killer butchering altar boys, but soon discovers a demonic force has invaded her very own home.
Hopefully that helps :-)
James Welday - Thank you! I am just seeing this as I update my work. Loglines are always been my least favorite thing to write. I appreciate the help.
No worries, happy to help! They're not my favorite thing either.
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