A great start, Allison. Getting strong hints as to what kind of story this is going to be. To improve, it would be great to include a little more on the opposition to her dream. This logline is the start of a story. It almost needs a "but..." at the end of the above to convey some kind of conflict. And then, ideally, if you can suggest something of the stakes, this would be perfect.

But a promising logline. If you'd like any help with creating loglines, by all means message me anytime.

This is a long logline. Closer to a mini synopsis. I would try to break the story down to the minimal thematic. Maybe something like; "An American-Salvadoran dreams of college as she struggles to help her underprivileged family." :)

It sounds promising and it is something people can relate to more than a wealthy billionaire story. If this were my log line. I might consider changing it to " A high school girl, along with her mother run a New York City food cart to keep her family above water, with the hopes of getting into college . "

**Feel free to use part, any or all of this log line.

Dustin Quinteros thank you for taking the time to look at it!!! I really appreciate the feedback. I love the suggestion as well.

Tim Bragg thank you, thank you for the suggestion and the feedback.