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After a disobedient teen and her mom move to a small town, the family and a neighbor try to escape from a living house that wants a daughter, wife, and live-in maid.
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Horror/Comedy feature script for option or sale
Picture Monster House as a live-action movie
Sub-genres: Contained Horror/Supernatural/Young Adult
Budget: Low ($3MM-$5MM)
Short Synopsis: A disobedient teenager named Julie and her mom, Andrea, move into a small-town house that’s alive. Knowing it’s alive, their new neighbor, Harriet, tells them they need to move out. The house introduces itself as Hank and says it wants Andrea and Julie to be its family; to replace its wife and daughter who died. They say no, so it locks them inside and says they’re not leaving. It tells Harriet she will be the family’s maid. Julie, Andrea, and Harriet try to escape, but the house prevents them from getting out. After Julie and Andrea find out about the house’s main weakness, they injure it and escape. Full synopsis in treatment.
Why This Movie and Why Now?: I wrote this script because I wanted to write about teenage disobedience in a fun way. I also wanted to write something that was contained and low-budget. Why make this movie now? There are millions of disobedient teens around the world right now. This movie can change them (and they’ll be entertained by it too).
Thanks for hearing my pitch. A script treatment and a pitch deck are available. Message me on Stage 32 or email me with any questions.
Poster by Burhanaligfx (Fiverr.com). Teddy bear from Canva.com. Poster edited with Canva.com.
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Thanks for the rating, Cameron. I just posted about this project on your post.
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It's such a great idea for a movie! The concept alone made me chuckle. But the execution in the synopsis really sold me.
Thanks, Cameron. I appreciate it. The way the house uses items is hilarious.
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Thanks for the suggestions, Steven. They're great. I'll consider them.
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Although the Logline could use some tightening up, this sounds like a great time.
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It sounds interesting.
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Thanks, Tim. This was a really fun script to write. I wanted to write a unique script that mainly takes place in one location.
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Thanks, Julie May. The main character shares the same first name as you. :)
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This is a really epic idea!
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I really like the idea of the house as a character of its own. It does offer new perspectives in the horror genre.
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Thanks for rating and thanks for the comment, @Marcel Nault Jr.! Yeah, I wanted to do something fresh with the house. It's funny but crazy and dangerous.
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Maurice Vaughan This sounds hilarious! Too bad Gilbert Gottfried is gone. He coulda been a great voice for "Hank". 5 Stars!!!!!
Thanks for rating, @Lee! I agree. Gilbert Gottfried would've been a great voice for Hank!
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This concept is chillingly great for Halloween. Way to go, Maurice Vaughan !
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