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When an old extraterrestrial finds online the perfect planet for his vacation, he faces an annoying pop-up that will ruin his vacation.
SYNOPSIS:
In a chaotic metropolis of an extraterrestrial planet, Frank is facing the loneliness of the life of an elderly (lonely, poor and widower) who, however, does not miss dreaming: to leave together with Dotty, his deceased wife who loved animals, in the form of a photo, for a holiday for their wedding anniversary.
The Jade Ocean Cruise (a favorite destination for silk seals) is the trip they promised to take but Frank's retirement doesn't cover the trip. In a technological future, pitfalls are around every corner, even behind booking a trip online. Between one pop-up and the next, there's one that offers a 70% discount on travel to a planet with bad reviews: The Planet Earth...
Some reviews tell of the cruelties of mankind: pollution, animal abuse, abandonment, degradation, war, violence, religious fanaticism and deforestation.
Something redeems the planet in Frank's eyes: the sound of water (on his planet "water" makes another noise) and the gigantic creatures that move like dancers in the oceans: whales.
Frank (with Dotty) wants to reach Earth but it's not that easy. You have to sell everything and get into a (shabby) camper and leave for their dream planet...
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