You may want to reword the synopsis a little. I was confused about the gender of the child.

Tasha Lewis 2 Sure, am on it, thank you.

@Wally alright great will do, thank you.

Here is a resource Side by Side Grammar guide where it places English by whatever language you need.

Tasha Lewis 2 Was there an URL you wanted to share with me? I do not see this at present.

Barry John Terblanche It is work in progress. Once done, i will post here on the platform.

Tauri Zhanje Amazon.com has it. When you search Side by Side plus languages grammar guide (example Side by Side English and Spanish Grammar Guide which was the one I used for my students). I don’t know if they have Aficans but you can get it for English.

Tasha Lewis 2 alright super, thank you for this tip. I am now changing the log line again. I think i nailed it. Here it is:

A pederast son teams up with a brothel prostitute to prevent his rapist father from becoming a Senator. He discovers a half-brother, and when the judge discovers the threat, he must outsmart his evil father before he changes the rape law with holy means.

Another tip. Check out resources like outline worksheets where you can cross reference your corrections and feedback so readers can read and compare.Taurai Zhanje.

Hi Tasha Lewis 2 alright on it.

your logline is totally confusing - try rewriting it with a max of 29 words - 25 would be better. Try this A young adult teams up with a prostitute to prevent his father who is a rapist from becoming a senator. because of the rape laws. Taurai Du Plessis

Thanks Kacee Potential