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LIVE LONG

LIVE LONG
By Kat Rollinson

GENRE: Romance, Drama
LOGLINE:

Trapped in a temporal loop following a fatal accident, a beleaguered florist makes the ultimate sacrifice to free herself and save her soulmate from repeated death.

SYNOPSIS:

In the aftermath of a car crash, Mollie howls with anguish as Noah breathes his last breath, then she vanishes. Now called “Des”, she stumbles back into oblivious - and unscathed - Noah’s life, and they spend a disturbingly perfect day together. Des is gone by morning - leaving a note saying “Live Long”, and an uneasy feeling in besotted Noah that she seemed to know him already.

His cynical friend Marcus brushes it off as a narrow escape, but when Noah spies Des stalking him, he pursues her. She escapes but drops her journal, which Noah takes. Flicking through it, he sees glued-in calendars of future timelines, dates circled, indecipherable notes about him - and photos of him with a beard, which he has never had. When Des returns for the journal, she faints and a panicked Noah deposits her in his bathtub until she comes round.

During a tense confrontation between “stalker” Des and “kidnapper” Noah, she reveals all: she has lived this relationship multiple times over, each time failing to prevent Noah’s death. She dreads another attempt, but despite the high probability that he will die again, Noah suggests that they work together to prevent it this time. If they fail, the time loop will likely restart and they can go their separate ways.

Noah and Des build their relationship, and their love, one last time. Their happiness is soon blighted by worry - Des restricts what Noah is allowed to do, as she also battles her own failing health and disturbing memories of past failures. Marcus, along with Des’s acerbic friend Sadie, becomes increasingly concerned that Noah and Des are bad for each other. As Sadie and Marcus reluctantly join forces to try to talk sense into them, this morphs into an “enemies with benefits” relationship, with Sadie always keeping Marcus at arms’ length. Their attempts ultimately backfire, as Des and Noah close ranks.

Des has a premonition of Noah’s next death, which spooks her, as does a positive pregnancy test result. The pregnancy eats away at her, causing her health issues to go into overdrive, and bringing her to a crushing realisation - each time she has failed to save Noah from death, she was the one who should have died.

Des concludes that neither she nor the unborn baby should exist, and resolves to end her own stuttering life in order to save Noah’s. Poised on a cliff-edge, she explains to Noah why this is the only possible outcome - leaving him distraught in the wake of her plummet. Marcus and Sadie arrive just in time to pull Noah back from the brink. Reeling from her friend’s death, Sadie turns to Marcus for comfort.

At Sadie and Marcus’s quirky wedding, after two years of battling doubters when he finally told his story, Noah reveals that there are others like him - collateral damage left by time travellers. He resolves to set up a support group, and looks forward to new beginnings.

LIVE LONG

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Marcos Fizzotti

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Nate Rymer

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Maurice Vaughan

This is an interesting time loop idea, Kat Rollinson. I think your logline needs some work though. "struggles through a final attempt to free herself and save her soulmate from repeated death" and "taking drastic action to escape their temporal loop" are basically saying the same thing.

Tasha Lewis

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Arthur Charpentier

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Kat Rollinson

Many thanks Arthur Charpentier Nate Rymer Tasha Lewis Marcos Fizzotti for the logline ratings!

Kat Rollinson

Maurice Vaughan thank you for the advice, and I have actually been working on redrafting the logline... Does this one play any better: "A conflicted florist battles through a final attempt to free herself and save her soulmate from repeated death, concluding that her own existence is the problem."... it avoids the repetition and has a bit more dramatic content?

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Kat Rollinson. The logline is better, but I think it still needs some work.

I think you need to add the inciting incident. Here's a logline suggestion: "After ______ (the inciting incident -- maybe how they got stuck in the time loop), a conflicted florist attempts to free herself and save her soulmate from repeated death."

You could also put the inciting incident at the end: “A conflicted florist attempts to free herself and save her soulmate from repeated death after ______ (the inciting incident).”

Kat Rollinson

Maurice Vaughan thanks again for the suggestion... How's this: "Thrust into a temporal loop by a fatal accident, a conflicted florist strives to free herself and save her soulmate from repeated death, concluding that her own existence is the problem".

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Kat Rollinson. I'm not sure if "concluding that her own existence is the problem" is needed, but it's ultimately up to you. :) This sounds like a really exciting project.

Kat Rollinson

Thanks Maurice Vaughan . I will stick with that last part, as another bit of feedback said that I should mention what sets this apart from other temporal loop films and I think this is it - one has to die in order to free the other. Glad you like the sound of the project, will let you know if it goes anywhere,

Do let me know if there's anything I can do to return the favour :)

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Kat Rollinson. After reading that part again, I do think it sets your script apart from other temporal loop films. You could even change "concluding that her own existence is the problem" to "one has to die in order to free the other" somehow, but I'm not sure if you want to wait and reveal "one has to die in order to free the other" in the script or not.

Ok, please do let me know how things go with your script.

Thanks for the offer.

Marcos Fizzotti

You're welcome, Kat.

Mirella Muffarotto

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