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THE ASSASSIN
By Charles Samuel (bigsam)
SYNOPSIS:
Sam was born and brought in the fear of God suffer enough humiliation and torture by is schools mate who belong to different cult group. .He pressured to get himself invove and later became the most dangerous assassin in the campus. . Spider grow up in the same town with sam, as a childhood spider is surprise to hear that Sam is the most wanted cult guy in the campus even when he as became cult Lord for years his records are not close to that of Sam. Spider choice to war against sam.
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Hi, Charles. This sounds really cool, but the logline doesn't quite meet the definition of a logline. You want it to grab the reader and contain only certain info: the protagonist, the goal, the antagonist and the obstacle the protagonist must overcome to reach the goal. Also, try to make it shorter. For example, you can say "A college student" instead of "A young undergraduate student." And what is a a cult cartel on a college campus? You may want to describe that in a different way so readers know what you're talking about. Best of luck to you!
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