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WISH
By Antarjit Ghosh

GENRE: Drama, Adventure
LOGLINE:

A terminally-ill bed ridden woman in a hospital tells a ward-boy about her last wish, that bound him to go for a quest/voyage that changed his entire life forever.......  

SYNOPSIS:

The story is about 3 protagonists: a ward boy, a female patient and a postman. The story starts from a small district civil hospital. It’s the initial period of the outbreak of the Pandemic. The time when no one knows about the disease & everyone is frightened even the medical staff too. Everyone is scared of touching or even treating the patients of the COVID. The equipment is also minimal including the ventilators and PPE kits. Meanwhile one day the lady got admitted infected with the COVID.

While treating the woman the ward boy gets to know about her last wish! At first he did not give attention to her and treated her as one of the day to day general patients but when her condition degraded he bound to do so, & he set out for the quest/voyage to fulfil her last wish. In this journey he meets with an old postman, who helped him and played a big role in the course. But still he could not complete the task & returned very sad. But when he returned he found to his great surprise he completed the task out of his knowledge! He finds that the entire game was of something else & that’s the twist of the story at the climax.

B A Mason

Odd use of dash marks.

B A Mason

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Tasha Lewis

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Angela Cristantello

Hi, Antarjit! The way that your logline is currently phrased, though, it is a little confusing as to who the actual protagonist is (we assume it's this ward boy, but it does certainly feel like it's the terminally ill woman at the beginning). Making that protagonist ultra clear will be extremely helpful.

Also, we'd love to know more about this quest, what exactly it is, WHY it's this woman's last wish and why it should affect this boy at all.

Some fun stuff here, though!

Antarjit Ghosh

Thanks Angela for your feedback. I have changed the log-line abit please go through it & for now I want to keep the other stuffs a bit mysterious including the quest/voyage!

Tasha Lewis

Antarjit Ghosh loglines are looking much better. I look forward to seeing the updates in the synopsis.

Antarjit Ghosh

Thank U Tasha... I have updated the synopsis too.

Tasha Lewis

Your welcome Antarjit. My pleasure to be of assistance. Use the introduce you weekend to network and prepare for what’s to come.

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