Hi there, Dave! There is so much good stuff here. If this is a comedy, though, I wonder both A) if there's a way that you could streamline all of the different obstacles that are standing in this young woman's way, & B) let us know somehow in that phraseology that this is, in fact, a comedy. Right now, it doesn't read that way. In fact, if you'd stopped at "...insane plan to broadcast the hunt on the internet", that makes for one heckuva drama/thriller.

Again, fun stuff to play with, though, for sure!