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VENDETTA
By Jack Calvin Girod
After an attempt on her life, a young girl aims to topple the town's Mob Boss.
SYNOPSIS:
Jaime Hampton, 22, was thrust into life she wasn't prepared for when he parent's cheated the town's mob boss Mr. Lucino. After he parent's assassination, she would train for years, and aim too topple the Lucino Empire. She wasn't alone as her friend Evan is a savant with computers, and aids her in the technological aspect of her hunt. Together they aim too take down Lucino's Assassin, and then the man himself.
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Hi Jack, I'd recommend mentioning that Jaime's parents cheated the mob boss, and that's why they're after her. It makes the logline sound a lot more interesting. I'd suggest wording it something like this: "After her parents cheat a local mob boss, Jaime's life is suddenly in danger. With the help of her tech savvy friend Evan, she plans to topple the mob for good."
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