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THE FLOWER'S LIGHT
By Barbara Dvoran
Brutal attacks and a murder take place in Vienna. An investigator and a young woman try to stop this wave of violence, caused by psychological manipulation and hypnosis. To find out the truth, they have to risk their own lives.
SYNOPSIS:
Flowers with certain meanings are found at the crime scenes. The police officer starts his investigation, supported by the letters of a young woman. They soon enter a world of manipulation, hypnosis and betrayal. Reading Freud's and Jung's theorems and questioning their own psychological strength they might find the answers they are looking for.
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As a logline, this is running long. Sounds like you've got plenty of depth in the story, which is promising, but I would suggest tightening this down to the main plot thread, revealing who your lead is, what they want, who stands in their way and what is at stake.
If you'd like to discuss this further, do feel free to message me.
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Hi Phil, thank you very much for your feedback and your advice. You are right, it's quite detailled. I will shorten it and add those informations.
I'd surely like to discuss this further in future, when my novel will be almost finished. Many greetings to London
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Barbara Dvoran anytime.