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A strong Latina, Camila Carrington, puts herself at the center of Atlanta's criminal underworld after her brother has been brutally murdered in search of revenge but turns into a deadly game of power, betrayal, and vengeance, wherein every turn appears to be fatal.
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When Mateo Carrington is shot down in cold blood, Camila's world comes crashing down around her, overwhelmed by the grief and anger that embrace her soul. She vows to square the account in regard to her brother's assassination at whatever cost, giving up life as she knows it. Spiraling into Atlanta's dark, brutal world of drug trafficking, Camila transforms from being the crying sister of a wrongfully accused man into someone who is very dangerous, bound, and determined to take down the men behind her brother's murder.
But as Camila claws her way to the top, she finds that the very world into which she has just plugged herself is so much more treacherous than anything she could have imagined. Her every move is shadowed by a mysterious figure who seems to know her deepest fears and secrets. This enigmatic presence, known only as the Shadow, threatens not just her mission but her very sanity.
As alliances are stretched to the breaking point, the line that separates friend from foe dims, and Camila finds herself more and more stretched as her thirst for revenge is weighed against the growth of her darkness. Every move she makes just draws her further and further into a dark realm of power, treachery, and sacrifice—maybe the price for vengeance will be higher than what she would wish to pay.
It's an all-too-human story of loss, loyalty, and a consuming quest for revenge in “Overtaken by Temptation,” delving into how far one young woman will go in the name of her dead brother and the terrible cost of those decisions.
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The first part of the logline is fine, Shannon Wilkins, but I think the second part needs work.
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Maurice Vaughan, thank you. What might you suggest?
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Hey Shannon Wilkins, I like this idea a lot but I bumped a little on the second half as well. I think it might be a mix of the flow, and playing it a little too coy (which I do all the time when I'm working on loglines lol). Can I ask, how far into the script is she foiled and confronted with something worse? Is that in the first 30 or so pages or later on?
Maybe something like this, Shannon Wilkins: "After her brother is brutally murdered, a Latina hustler seeks vengeance by tracking down his killers and seizing control of the Atlanta drug ring while an unknown capturer pursues her."
I think the synopsis needs some work. It needs to flow smoother. In the sixth and ninth paragraphs, you mention that Camila's brother is killed. You also mention that Camila and Jasmine are long-time friends/best friends three times. In the eighth paragraph, it says Camila is killed, but she shows up later in the synopsis.
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Maurice Vaughan can you message me on this synopsis? I am not clear about what you are saying. Thanks.
Hi, Shannon Wilkins. I was talking about the synopsis that's posted here (the one that's under your logline).
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Maurice Vaughan oh ok
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Emily J I am done with the script for now until I have to rewrite it again as another draft.. I answer your question it is in the middle of act 2
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