Hi, Toneice Evans. I like the concept and this sounds like a movie I would watch, but I think the logline needs some things added (mainly the character's goal).

For a logline, you want something like: "After ______ (something happens/the inciting incident), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) tries to _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes)."

Loglines can be one or two sentences. You can add the antagonist/source of conflict in the logline. The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline.

Example #1:

"After a group of dog criminals arrives in a small town, an impulsive dog sheriff defends a dog treat factory so they won't steal food that's meant for hungry dog families."

Example #2:

"A dysfunctional couple works together to survive against bears after they crash on an abandoned road miles from help."

Hope this helps.

Thanks for the feedback!

You're welcome, Toneice Evans.