Hi fellow filmmakers, I made another short film, and would appreciate any constructive feedback on it, thanks! I only had an evening to shoot it, no additional crew members to help, and a $0 budget... https://vimeo.com/177725003 Cheers, Andrew
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Hey Andrew, Good cinematography, but I felt like you were stretching your footage in the editing room. Lots of shot reverse shots happening which always slows down the story beats for me as a viewer. I understand you only had the evening to shoot it and no budget, but I think this piece would be better referred to as a scene study or an experiment. For me there just wasn't enough story here to last for 3 minutes (not too mention your OWN time constraint). One thing I liked was when you kept the male's face more obscured and focused the composition on her. Those were the shots that worked for me. Almost like her memory of him was difficult to recollect. Keeping his face out of frame or using only shots where he was out of focus in the background would also help to show her feeling of separation. Taking a more subjective approach to the whole "character sitting and reflecting on memories" is a great time to shoot things really stylized and go way out there creatively. You definitely have a good eye and an ear for music! Looking forward to your next piece!