Hey, everyone...
I received an analysis of my script... in part he wrote... I copied and pasted it
" I'd suggest you rewrite the Saunnie and Gomez intro to reveal they are undercover cops to the reader - it is okay to fool the audience with your set up, but when sending this to a producer, they needs to know their status when they are introduced to help push them to continue reading."
I've never heard of this before. Do you guys do that? Tailor it to whoever you're sending it to???
I agree with Laura. But, why not film the script yourself, that way you can tell your story the way it’s meant to be told.
Basically, I have to agree with Laura but it would be nice to have a better understanding of the story line - maybe a simple logline. You tailor your story to the intended audience. Any reader who doesn't understand that needs to turn in his reading glasses.
Never been asked and I have actually been told that it was a big surprise to learn, in my screenplay for instance, that the lead character was gay, even though there were hints all along, but I refuse to let the audience fully know because if I did, the climax would not be "the climax" since this revelation sets in motion a whole chain of detrimental events. So, I guess it depends on who reads your screenplay. Great point to bring up, Silvia, thank you my friend.
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If it isn't obviously by their action then I agree you should say they are working undercover because you never want to fool someone that is considering spending money on your project.
Tailoring it to a specific audience, no need unless you see fit.... I do not take this as that, however, even though I can understand you may have taken it that way from the verbage. Clarifying a character or plot component to the reader before it is revealed to the audience, writer's choice, it may vary by script. If later-story-revelation makes the script read more entertaining, or an up front explanation helps avoid any confusion, then either is a plus. Notes are meant to be taken with salt. When reviewing any notes from script to screenings, I generally believe you ignore what you hear only once and strongly investigate what you hear repeatedly. The exception to this is when the lone comment is coming from someone with the checkbook open and pen in hand.