Need a great logline for script being pitched to studios by my rep as a possible cable TV series. It is a 3 time finalist, and just finished in 3rd place in the Courier Awards. The Fourth Night is an old fashioned private detective story set in 1938 Los Angeles. Think Bogart's Sam Spade and Philip Marlowe characters. Steven Hawk is charismatic, charming, dashing, suave, and has a quick wit. This does not mean, however, that he is infallible. Steven tends to get himself in very dire, many times almost fatal, situations. He makes serious mistakes but is very persistent. Steven is a mesh of Bogart's Philip Marlowe and Sam Spade characters colliding with Steve McQueen ruggedness and toughness, Han Solo sarcasm, and Indiana Jones attitude thrown in. New York Private Detective Steven Hawk is called to Los Angeles to handle a case, but when he arrives he discovers that his client has been murdered. He is quickly thrust into a web of corruption, crime, deceit, detectives, double-cross, embezzlement, murder, and mystery. Added to this deadly cocktail is a sultry femme-fatale torch singer who is entangled in a web of lies, deceit, and deadly intentions which may prove fatal for Steven Hawk. I have 4 other scripts in development with the Steven Hawk character spanning the years 1938-1950. This gave my rep the idea to put together a pitch package and pitch to studios as a possible cable TV series. Only problem is i draw a blank when it comes to a log line. Anyone have any ideas? I can add more about the plot if necessary.
Screenwriting : Logline Help Needed!! by Mike Briock
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How about this: Steven Hawk, a rough and gritty NY detective, wheels around in his chair to thwart an entangled web of lies and crime, however, when he discovers the true origins of black holes, he has to decide between fighting crime or giving that one great lecture on the theory of everything. #WINNING
I will add more about the plot... Again, set in 1938 Los Angeles New York Private Detective Steven Hawk is called to Los Angeles to handle a case, but when he arrives he discovers that his client has been murdered. He is quickly thrust into a web of corruption, crime, deceit, detectives, double-cross, embezzlement, murder, and mystery. Added to this deadly cocktail is a sultry femme-fatale torch singer who is entangled in a web of lies, deceit, and deadly intentions which may prove fatal for Steven Hawk. Bank President Henry Miller is pursued through the rainy streets of Los Angeles by mob goons. Henry is fatally injured after crashing his car. His secretary Susan Johnson then finds herself relentlessly stalked by a very ominous figure. Terrified, Susan calls her aunt in New York City. Her aunt is the secretary of Steven Hawk. Soon after speaking with her aunt and Steven on the phone, Susan is brutally murdered in her home. Steven Hawk arrives in Los Angeles expecting to meet and help Susan, but instead arrives to find detectives at Susan's home, who inform him that Susan has been murdered. Caught completely off-guard and shocked, Steven and the detectives quickly become at odds with each other. Steven is warned by the detectives that it is an active police homicide investigation and he should return to New York immediately. Steven declines, and is sternly warned by the detectives not to mettle in a police investigation or attempt to investigate the case himself. Steven does mettle... a lot, which puts him at greater odds with the LAPD detectives. He tries to solve the connection and mystery of Henry and Susan's deaths, uncovering greater mysteries and a multitude of suspicious acquaintances and deadly criminal types. Steven then learns that Henry was involved with a drop dead gorgeous sultry night club singer named Joyce Dorrington. He makes contact with Joyce at the club where she is employed... and is quickly drawn and thrust into a complicated and extremely dangerous web of corruption, crime, deceit, double-cross, embezzlement, murder, mystery, and very deadly intentions. And to make matters much worse... everyone seems to want Steven dead at all costs.
Try this one: Private detective Steven Hawk is called to Los Angeles, circa 1938, but his client has been murdered and from there things go from bad to worse, especially when a sultry torch singer with deadly intent is added to the mix.