I have this shot heading followed by an action line:
INT. UNDEFINED LOCATION (COLORADO) - LIVING ROOM - DAY - (DECEMBER 2010)
Transitional style living room.
Anybody know if it Is it allowed to take the "living room" part out of the header and make it part of the action line, so I have a shorter header and there is no double "living room" -- like
INT. UNDEFINED LOCATION (COLORADO) - DAY - (DECEMBER 2010)
Transitional style LIVING ROOM
Blablabla.
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Thanks
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It’s a bit confusing. The whole point of scene headings is so the director and the production folks know how to shoot the scene and how to group scenes for the shooting schedule. If you don’t want the audiences to know, then you could do a title insert for unknown location somewhere in Colorado.
You could put "LIVING ROOM" in the scene heading and put "Colorado" and "December 2010" in an action line, Rutger Oosterhoff, then write "transitional style room" or "transitional style living room."
This is how it starts,:
FADE IN:
INT. UNDEFINED LOCATION (COLORADO) - LIVING ROOM - DAY - (DECEMBER 2010)
Transitional style living room.
A FACELESS FIGURE with an unopened scrapbook on lap, watches TV -- an out of focus FRAMED PICTURE in the background.
It doesn't really matter were our figure we can only partly see lives, I guess somewere just out of the city.
Maybe
INT. SECLUDED HOUSE (COLORADO) - LIVING ROOM - DAY - (DECEMBER 2010)
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That could be an option Maurice, but it doesn't fit in qith the other scene headers / action lines to come.
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Yes, an insert is always possible Christopher.
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I have a few SUPERS in the script Claude, it wotks, but takes up a lot of space.
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Rutger Oosterhoff Hey, Rutger, here are some ideas:
INT. COLORADO SUBURB - DAY
Christmas or Winter, 2010. In living room...
*I was told by an exec to use caps only when introducing characters by name the first time. If non-specific, no caps.How about this, Rutger Oosterhoff:
INT. UNDEFINED LOCATION - LIVING ROOM - DAY
A faceless figure sits in a transitional style room, watching TV -- an out of focus FRAMED PICTURE in the background. An unopened scrapbook rests on his/her lap.
A Colorado Journal newspaper lies beside him/her, dated December 5, 2010.
Rutger Oosterhoff I also like Robin Gregory's suggestion for a scene heading ("INT. COLORADO SUBURB - DAY").
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If "non specific' NO caps. Good one Robin, have to think about that!
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... This could maybe work Maurice! An other problem could maybe bec"FACELESS FIGURE"; In principle this means 'without face', but in this case I wsnt it to mean that we can't see his/her face (clearly) when the sudience sees an 'over shoulder shot' toward the tv, and in the same line of side the out of focus picture behind it. Could not find an other two words to desctibe thd figure.
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FADE IN:
INT. COLORADO SUBURB - DAYA faceless figure sits in a transitional style room, watching TV -- an out of focus FRAMED PICTURE in the background. An unopened scrapbook rests on his lap.
A Colorado Journal newspaper lies beside him, dated December 5, 2010.
The figure cathes the news story about "The Gavel.,"
This could work if I mean "Colorado" as a city instead of (only,) a state?! Or does it mean a "suburb" if whatever city not refering to Colorado Springs?
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I think you're ok with "faceless," Rutger Oosterhoff. I looked it up, and one of the meanings is "not identified" (www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/faceless).
"This could work if I mean "Colorado" as a city instead of ,(only,) a state?!" Maybe "The Denver Journal." Or "The Denver Herald." Etc.
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The full scene now is this,:
FADE IN:
INT. COLORADO SUBURB - DAY
A faceless figure sits in a transitional style room, watching TV -- an out of focus FRAMED PICTURE in the background.
An unopened scrapbook rests on lap. A Colorado Journal newspaper lies beside, dated December 5, 2010.
The figure catches the news story about "The Gavel."
NATIONAL NEWS ANCHOR
... And in other news, in Austin, Texas, suspected muggers have been assaulted and spray-painted...
Turns up the volume.
NATIONAL NEWS ANCHOR
... with the word “Guilty” and left incapacitated by the unknown vigilante dubbed “The Gavel.”
The figure throws the remote at the TV, yanks a map out of a drawer, and looks up Austin, Texas. Taps finger on it.
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How about a defined place: DENVER - SUBURBAN - HOME - DEN - DAY
A MC dressed in a bunny suit watches a football game on T.V., drinking carrot juice ....
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Ok, thanks to all!!
You're welcome, Rutger Oosterhoff.
Thought about defining it Jenean, but doesn't seem to work with the detective work in the script. At some point the twins and the antagonist both live in the state Colorado, that's what I've gone with.