My cosmic romance - first scene | Luciano Mello

Hi everyone, hope you're all doing great! I wrote a short film called 'My Cosmic Romance' and here's the logline: 'A lonely and disillusioned biology teacher finds an unexpected connection with a mysterious cosmic being who seeks to unravel the secrets of life on Earth. Together, they embark on a journey of learning and self-discovery through the vibrant and chaotic streets of Rio de Janeiro.' You can read the screenplay or synopsis here: [ https://www.stage32.com/profile/643029/Screenplay/My-cosmic-romance-2 ]. I've edited the first scene, which is 2:30 minutes of the Voyager probe traveling through space. I'm not sure if the visual storytelling is working, so if you could check it out and let me know what you think, that would be a huge help. It's a rough cut with basic visual effects and music from the artist Lenine ( https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xYUiJycMznM ) . Thanks in advance for your feedback!"