Hey fellow creatives, I am about to write animation script and I am stuck between two loglines. If you guys don't mind, which logline seems to catch your attention? Title: K-9(not final title) Genre:Animation 1)An abandoned dog gets a second chance at life to prove he is a good dog when he is recruited by the police force. 2)A loyal K-9 gets amnesia after discovering a dirty cop and now must regain his memory before the cop takes over the city. Thanks
Screenwriting : Which story should I choose? by Eric Kinloch
Which story should I choose?
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Thanks CJ, I was leaning more towards 2 but I figured I get some fresh eyes on it.
Of the two, I prefer the sounds of the second one but, have you established a story that you want to write as yet, because both these loglines tell a different story. They both need work but which one do you want to put the effort into improving? What's your synopsis?
Not really I don't have a full story yet, everything is still in the early stages (brainstorming). I was going to improve on which ever one people on seemed to like, which is the second one
Okay. Which story would you like to write? Which story has more of a drive, for you?
Both really but I need to focus on one lol
Perhaps you should go for the second one. The first is the same as the original K9 film written by Scott Myers.
Thanks for the feedback, looks like the second one wins
Appreciate the advice and your wife is a writing machine! I wouldn't mind writing both but I just need one and I usually do it this way so I won't stray from the actual story.
Eric: I would actually use parts of both loglines: "An unwanted dog with abandonment issues finds a home with the police department, fights crime and stands in the way of a corrupt cop trying to take over the city.” Now you're not saying dog or cop twice in the same sentence. You would also have a logline that identifies protagonist, antagonist and the pooch's mission. And writing some variations is always a good way to go. Blessings to you sir! Do dogs get amnesia? Somebody research that and get back to me.
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Thanks Phillip, I going to make note of that when I start my beat sheet