Hi all, gearing up to submit my partial adaptation of Paradise Lost into the ScreenCraft Fellowship competition soon. Need some comments on the logline to see if it needs more adjusting. The script deals with Lucifer's rebellion. Any thoughts would be much appreciated!
Working Logline: After meeting his new king, a prideful archangel manipulates several of his brothers into waging a war for control over Heaven.
Maybe end with the king. Save Heaven from the bastard.