A jaded paramedic is unaware he was chosen thousands of years ago by an ancient god to lead an unwitting group against a dark and mystical force, he and the Indigo Children must continually reincarnate throughout history to defend humanity.
Link to the synopsis below, any comments or constructive criticism welcome
https://www.stage32.com/loglines/44616
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Pass. Same generic plot (saving humanity...yarn), no new twist to make me read script. Focus on main character's goal.
the long logline has punctuation errors.
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Indigo children were a new-agey popular idea for a hot minute, but they are long gone and weren't too interesting at the time, IMO
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We’re resurrecting
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“unaware” and “unwitting” are so over used in loglines. It is up there with “bunch of misfits” or “shy teen”. How does a Jaded Paramedic add to the logline?
What is the emotional centre of the story?
“Dark forces” is also a meaningless thing in this context. This is not your story, but an example.
Learning that he is a reincarnated warrior a man teams with a team of fellow reincarnates to prevent an ancient force from xxxxxxx.
xxxxxx could be trigger a nuclear conflict, open a portal to hell, whatever you like.