Screenwriting : Feedback request, please! by Sallie Olson

Feedback request, please!

I just finished my first attempt at a screenplay, based on my short story: The Club of Silence. It's a twisted-western-horror, rated R. Twenty-three pages. I'm hoping to find a few people willing to beta-read and provide feedback: story, formatting, etc...whatever you see that needs to be corrected, improved, etc... Splash the pages with red ink! No need for kid gloves, I have a thick skin and learn fastest from my mistakes. :)

Logline: An old west bad guy bent on revenge stops in a prairie town to scratch an itch, but he gets more than he bargained for when he encounters a nymphomaniac demon disguised as a prostitute.

Ciara Smith

Oh I'd love to read this for you! I don't have final draft, but if you send a pdf I could make notes!

Sallie Olson

Ciara Smith Awesome! Thank you! I am trying to figure out how to send a PDF via the private messages...is there a trick to it here? LOL And no worries, I don't have final draft either. ;)

Ciara Smith

Oh you could send it to ciara.smith0331@gmail.com !

Sallie Olson

Ciara Smith Done! :)

Ciara Smith

I look forward to reading it!

Marciano Hendricks

I Would Love To Read It send it to myimgtvgmail.com

Rutger Oosterhoff

Sure, send it over. But give me some time. My email address is roosterhoff@outlook.com

Sallie Olson

Thank you, Marciano Hendricks and Rutger Oosterhoff ! I'll go do that right now! <3

Justin Chomitzky

That sounds so unique! I would love to read that. My email is lv2clenhotmail.com

Sallie Olson

Justin Chomitzky I just emailed it to you, thank you! :)

Desiree Middleton

Congratulations. How many drafts have you done?

Sallie Olson

Desiree Middleton Since it is based on a short story I published years ago I just did the initial screenplay verbatim, and then went back through it a couple times, tweaking the story to adapt "inner dialog" for visual/audio medium, then saved that as "2" because it's altered from the original story.

Debbie Croysdale

@Sallie Sounds an interesting Urban Horror/Western. I don’t mind looking it over if you message me an email.

N. "Key" Ali

Hi Sallie, would love to read and offer feedback

Sallie Olson

Debbie Croysdale N. "Key" Ali I'd be happy to send it to you both, I just need your email addresses (maybe they're hiding right under my nose and I'm just not seeing them? LOL)

N. "Key" Ali

Sorry about that, nk.keyali@gmail.com

Sallie Olson

N. "Key" Ali Sent! Thank you! :)

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