Thank you... still working on it but enjoying the writing.

This sounds like a great animation story, Wendy Appelbaum. I like the logline. I just think you need to describe what the journey is. It says in the title that Peanut's journey is to get home, but in the logline, it says, "...a journey far away from her family." That part says that she ran away, but it doesn't mention that she's trying to get home.

Thanks Maurice - appreciate the feedback

You're welcome, Wendy Appelbaum. I mainly like one-sentence loglines, but loglines can be two sentences. I think your logline would benefit from two sentences (or rewrite your logline with breaks in it so the reader doesn't get winded).

I was thinking that too... thanks :)

You're welcome. Love the script's title!

I like the new logline better, Wendy Appelbaum. I would get rid of "new" from "new family." We know they're the dog's new family because of "recently adopted dog." I would remove "the" in "the obstacles." These two changes are small, but every word in a logline counts.

And I think the first sentence is still too long/it could still make a reader winded. Maybe change "leads her on a journey away from home" to "leads her away from home." So, the new first sentence would be: "A recently adopted dog forms a strong bond with her family only to have that jeopardized when her penchant for chasing light leads her away from home."

Thanks so much for your feedback and taking the time - much appreciated!

What about this? A recently adopted dog forms a strong bond with her family only to have that jeopardized when her penchant for chasing light leads her away from home. Relying on dimwitted luck, she must trust her instincts to find her way back to her family.