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THE BABE RUTH CONNECTION
By David Dicaire

GENRE: Sports
LOGLINE:

After a young man discovers he might have a son he didn’t know existed, he befriends a lifelong Babe Ruth fan and, fuelled by the Great Bambino’s heroics and quotes, sets out to prove the boy is his.

SYNOPSIS:

A young boy attending his first ball game sees Babe Ruth, then an unknown rookie, hit his first professional home run and becomes a lifelong fan. Years later, now an old man, he befriends a younger neighbour.

Later that day, the neighbour, going to a job interview, bumps into his once-used-to-be. She curiously holds the hand of a five-year-old boy who resembles him. Some six years before, when she found herself pregnant, the girl claimed a miscarriage and ended the relationship, forcing the father to sign a waiver. Through some detective work, the man realizes that the little boy could be his son.

On scattered visits, the old man tells Babe Ruth stories that fuel his friends ideas of how to gather evidence. They also trade Babe Ruth quotes, which become mantras for the father-to-be. But one attempt after another is thwarted. Upon starting a new job, he befriends the company lawyer, who tells him the only way to prove that boy is his son and to get around the waiver is to get a drop of the boy’s blood.

The young man confronts the mother’s child at the park. There is a physical altercation between him and her current boyfriend, a brutish man. The opportunity to obtain the blood presents itself, and after much trial and tribulation, he is finally able to prove that the boy is his son.

The last scene shows the young man and his son at a ballgame together.

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David Dicaire

Thanks! I guess I am improving.

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Maurice Vaughan

I really like the title and idea, David Dicaire!

I like the logline, but I think it could be tightened up a little. Here's a logline suggestion: "After a young man discovers he might have a son he didn’t know existed, he befriends a lifelong Babe Ruth fan and, fueled by the Great Bambino’s heroics and quotes, sets out to prove the boy is his."

David Dicaire

Hey Maurice, thanks again for your helpful suggestion.

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, David Dicaire. There's a quotation mark at the end of your logline.

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David Dicaire

Oops! Thanks Maurice Vaughan once again.

David Dicaire

Hey Marcos Fizzotti, thanks for the great rating.

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Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, David Dicaire.

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