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Bobby, a self-absorbed investment firm employee, gains the unexpected ability to see ghosts after a routine Lasik surgery. As word spreads in the spirit world, he is reluctantly drawn into a mission to help trapped spirits find peace, guided by a ghost named Derrick. Through this supernatural journey, Bobby undergoes a transformative shift from a selfish loner to a compassionate force for the departed.
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Bobby, a no-nonsense investment executive, undergoes LASIK surgery, expecting only improved vision. However, he gains an unexpected ability to see and communicate with ghosts. Faced with a barrage of spirits with unfinished business, Bobby reluctantly becomes a mediator between the living and the dead.
As he juggles the demands of his high-stakes corporate job and the ethereal responsibilities thrust upon him, Bobby encounters a diverse array of ghosts, each with unique and often humorous requests. From settling unresolved family matters to addressing unfulfilled life goals, Bobby navigates the challenges of the afterlife with his signature skepticism.
Amidst the chaos, Bobby encounters Derrick, a charismatic ghost who offers to help him manage the ghostly influx. However, Derrick's assistance comes at a cost – he wants to borrow Bobby's body once a month for 24 hours
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I would send Derek to look at the annual profitability reports of mega corporations.
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avoid using character names in your loglines, unless they are well known people of history, instead tell us about your character: A self-absorbed no-nonsense investment executive...
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Another intriguing story Bobby G and super cool graphic! I would still try to get logline down to 35 words or less though.