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BEST

BEST
By Mike Rembis

GENRE: Family, Comedy
LOGLINE:

When an inept employee at a car rental on an island where nobody needs a car is promoted, his jealous rival does her best to put BEST Rent-A-Car out of business.

SYNOPSIS:

Salt Rock Key, eight miles south of Marathon, Florida. Present day.

Only a half mile wide and one mile long, the Key is accessible only by plane or ferry. Since the local shuttle bus takes everyone wherever they like, rental cars are not needed, however, corporate giant BEST maintains the station for their image.

The local manager of BEST Rent-A-Car has been committed to an asylum. BEST must replace him with one of the quirky bunch of misfits that drove him crazy to begin with because that is corporate policy. BURKE the Regional Manager, jets down from Miami and offers the position to ANDI the mechanic, who is the only person he can trust. When she refuses the job, he is stuck choosing between ANTHONY, the self-proclaimed ladies man/sexual harassment suit looking for a place to happen, MARISSA, who has the IQ of a pop-tart, CAPRI, an imperialistic self-centered drama queen, and JACK, the ex-French-fry taste tester beach bum. A hasty coin flip places Jack in charge.

This infuriates Capri, who expected to become the manager due to her ten years of service. Working for her nemesis Jack is simply degrading. While at her job checking out cars she schemes to put BEST out of business by opening a moped without quitting her job at BEST. Once discovered, she alters her get-rich-quick idea every week. Sometimes, she is running a buffet, or a wine tasting, or selling Halloween pumpkins. Her best friend is Marissa.

Marissa, and her father THOMPSON, are Seminole Indians. Thompson owns the local casino, the hub of activity on the Key. The casino is host to conventions and concerts, which is always a draw for the rich and famous that consider Salt Rock Key a luxury getaway only an hour by plane from South Beach. Marissa works at the rental counter with Anthony.

Anthony is Jack’s best friend. He is known for wild flirtations with all the ladies and believes rejection is simply a form of a woman’s own self-control. He particularly likes flirting with NICOLE, Jack’s younger sister and roommate.

Nicole is the knockout blond bombshell who drives the island shuttle bus. It is the only public transportation on the island besides BEST rental cars and bicycles. She is Andi’s closest friend.

Andi is the true brains behind BEST, rather, she has more brains than anyone else there. Although she prefers to stay in the background, when problems arise, Andi helps Jack solve dilemmas.

One thing that Andi can’t help Jack with is the fact that he hired a mime to rent cars. Burke wasn’t crazy about the idea of a mime renting cars, but since BEST has an unwritten, “no-fire” policy, DAISY is on staff and at work daily.

Daisy has a twofold personality. When in white face, she’s a full-throttle mime. When she doesn’t wear make-up she is an ordinary person and this is when her true comedic timing shines.

Another ordinary person with impeccable comic timing on Salt Rock Key is DONNA, the banker. She moves in next door to Jack and Nicole and soon becomes Jack’s love interest. Her role as the banker helps tie together many of the characters we meet from the airport to the casino to the quaint little shops near the yacht basin.

EPISODES – SEASON ONE

PILOT - WELCOME TO BEST (Read it now!)

BEWARE OF BLONDZILLA The Secret Service is investigating counterfeiters, but in a case of mistaken identity, winds up busting a Super model look-alike (Nicole) for having a bad hair day.

BEHOLD THE POWER OF CHEESE A lost cheese wheel becomes the catalyst for a miracle among casino gamblers and a church convention.

EVERYONE LOVES A BUFFET Out on a date? Before a Jimmy Buffett tribute concert, an all-you-can-eat buffet is a tasty treat, especially for cannibals, professional wrestlers, and rock stars.

VILLAGE PEOPLE OF THE DAMNED The right Halloween costumes, an unshakable shuttle bus driver, and absolutely perfect timing; just a couple of things that help rescue a drag queen from military backlash when he poses as a Five-Star General.

YOU COULD LEARN A LOT FROM A DUMMY Capri finds a mannequin in the trunk of a rental car and slams it closed quickly, thinking it’s a real body. A NY/NJ wise-guy type comes looking for something he left in the car. Capri, determined to get a reward and see justice done, employs Jack and Anthony to go undercover and follow him. Later, Capri winds up in the trunk with the mannequin.

ROAD TRIP Andi needs Marissa and Daisy to help bring cars from Miami. Before you know it, the whole crew is driving around looking for each other. Capri is left alone at the rental counter to deal with a convention and a long line.

INVESTIGATION Who done it? Burke returns with a load of questions when Quality Assurance ranks Salt Rock Key the worst performing station of 1,600 worldwide locations. What really doesn’t make sense is that Anthony gets the top award in the company for outstanding performance in sales at the same time.

FOOLS JUMP IN Andi dates a skydiver who falls for Daisy. Since she jumped in mime makeup, he can’t seem to get enough! To get her man back, Andi decides to try mimicry her self, but just can’t seem to pull it off without Daisy’s help.

I.Q.? NO WAY! YOU Q! Marissa and Capri have a falling out over which one of them is smarter when they tie for lowest score in a video trivia game at the bar. They start looking for innovative ways to prove which one knows more. Andi suggests they both take the MENSA test.

THE GOOD LIFE Burke quits BEST to move to Salt Rock Key and embrace a nudist lifestyle. Andi is stuck between Burke and the Skydiver. Marissa finds peace when she adopts a Chia Pet that Anthony accidentally kills. Daisy reveals her past as a clairvoyant to Capri. Nicole decides to kick Jack out of her apartment, and he moves in with Donna, right next door.

BEST

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Maurice Vaughan

Unique concept, Mike Rembis. Almost solid logline. I suggest changing "looks" to something stronger, like "tries," "attempts," or "does everything in her power to."

Tasha Lewis

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Maurice Vaughan

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Maurice Vaughan

Hey, Mike Rembis. I realized after rating that your logline needs the stakes (what happens if she doesn't put BEST Rent-A-Car out of business).

Mike Rembis

I'll think about that one for a bit. The basis of the sitcom is that she will never put the multinational conglomerate BEST out of business, but keeps trying.

Maurice Vaughan

Does she have anything to lose if she doesn't put BEST Rent-A-Car out of business, Mike Rembis?

Mike Rembis

Maybe her self respect, but Capri would be hard pressed to lose her self respect, as she is quite a narcissistic diva. She expresses a great deal of frustration at the outset, but settles into the realization that nobody will stop her from doing whatever she wants using BEST as a base of operations. So, she always feels like she is winning, chipping away at BEST one customer at a time.

Maurice Vaughan

Ok, gotcha, Mike Rembis. I've been thinking about how to add the stakes in the logline, but you might be ok without the stakes.

Nate Rymer

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Robin Gregory

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Robin Gregory

Hey Mike Rembis , this looks like fun. Two things:

Tighten up the logline? When an inept car rental employee ...

Also, wouldn't the diva be shooting herself in the foot if she ruins the business that employs her?

Would it make more sense that she is determined to steal the promoted guy's customers and undermine him?

Mike Rembis

Hi Robin Gregory No, Capri can't steal customers because there are none to steal. Best is a corporate giant with a presence on a tiny island in the Florida keys where nobody needs a car. There is no way to put best out of business. The pilot screenplay is attached if you would like to get a better sense of it.

Robin Gregory

Mike Rembis , I'll get to it when I can! Thank you.

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