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A dark sinister creature, uses a human puppet to ensnare a group of young adults in a secluded forest, and one discovers a divine protection that may be their only hope against his sinister plans.
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Kormag, a sinister creature banished to the Shadow Realm, has found a way to breach the boundary between worlds. Desperate to restore his dark dominion, he crosses into the human world to harvest souls, using Marco, a seemingly ordinary man, as his unwitting puppet. With Marco’s help, Kormag lures a group of young adults—each struggling with their own sins and vices—to a mysterious, secluded house deep within an uncharted forest. The group, seeing it as a place of escape, decides to spend the night, unaware that their presence is no coincidence but rather an integral part of Kormag’s malevolent scheme.
As the night unfolds, the group encounters inexplicable horrors and supernatural occurrences that push them to the brink of madness. Paranoia and mistrust set in as Kormag manipulates their darkest secrets, driving wedges between the friends. One by one, they fall victim to his influence, until a startling revelation emerges: one of them bears a mark of divine protection. This chosen sinner, marked by a higher power, becomes a beacon of hope in the midst of chaos.
But time is running out. Kormag’s power grows stronger as the night deepens, and he will stop at nothing to isolate and annihilate his prey. The chosen one must harness this newfound gift, confronting his own guilt and fear, to unite the group and resist Kormag’s influence. It’s a battle not just for survival, but for redemption—against an evil that feeds on their very souls. As the final confrontation looms, will they stand together against the malevolent force, or will Kormag’s shadow consume them all?
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If you make your logline only one sentence from the beginning, it would come out much better. Loglines are typically 1 or 2 sentences long and it is to highlight who in the story, what are the stakes, and what is the goal. The synopsis is where you can go into more detail. It's also better to not use names in your logline, only a title or description of your main characters. For example, "A sinister creature from the Shadow Realm crosses into the human world to harvest and restore his dark domain, with the help of a human puppet."
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Thank you very much for your vote and advice. I have corrected my mistake and will follow your advice in the future.
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