I've recently received my story notes back for my script. It's a long story, so I'll get to the point. One of the points made in the notes went like this: "The ending is ineffective. It doesn't feel right to have the child die and then cobble together some sort of delayed redemption. It just doesn't...
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Hi Nikki There are a variety of options open to you, you're a writer. Just make sure that you are happy with the ending, and that it fits with the character, the tone and the genre of the piece. If th...
Expand commentHi Nikki There are a variety of options open to you, you're a writer. Just make sure that you are happy with the ending, and that it fits with the character, the tone and the genre of the piece. If the feedback was just down to one individuals personal taste then you can disregard it. If you have a number of people who have read the narrative telling you this ending is not working, then you may wish to reconsider. You will kick yourself if your project gets made, you change the ending and all the viewers hate it and thought you copped out. This is one of the reasons why you should never write just to please people ( I am not saying you are). All the best with it. It sounds like you are doing all the right things and will come to the right choice.
Sounds like it has the making of a great movie.... go for it lass....
I just like happy endings.... sighs
Just read again... I see Raven ATTEMPTS to get them out of that situation..... and the child is killed before SHE CAN ESCAPE it... that changes it a little in regards to her having ANOTHER CHILD. She...
Expand commentJust read again... I see Raven ATTEMPTS to get them out of that situation..... and the child is killed before SHE CAN ESCAPE it... that changes it a little in regards to her having ANOTHER CHILD. She TRIED to get out, but, too late.... I was thinking... what if.... the child is taken.... disappears without trace... Raven presumes she must be dead.... was it pay back for something? When she moves on, maybe she finds herself in another abusive situation... maybe raped by the abusive partner... she has another child. As the years go bye... Raven feels the remorse....But,. the first child somehow finds her way back to her mother.... Just a thought.... I really love your idea, and feel it... just reading about Raven makes you feel the emotion of the situation.... Would be nice to see Raven come out the winner in the end, against all odds..... regardless of what folk around her thought.
Or, the child died of natural causes... Raven blames herself... But, in truth she is not to blame...Getting pregnant to an abuser see's her having another baby.. Her remorse for having another child,...
Expand commentOr, the child died of natural causes... Raven blames herself... But, in truth she is not to blame...Getting pregnant to an abuser see's her having another baby.. Her remorse for having another child, is great.... feeling responsible for the death of the other. But, as time goes bye something comes up, to make her realise, that her child died of a natural cause, not due to her own feeling of neglect. I really LIKE your story lols... If I am sticky beaking, tell me to waddle onwards....