Interesting concept, Travis Seppala.

I think the main character is the woman, but the inventor is the one who has the goal in the logline, so it seems like he might be the main character. If the woman is the main character. I suggest adding her goal (escape? fight for survival?) and the stakes.

I also suggest changing "woman" to "_______ (the main flaw that she has to overcome or an adjective that describes her personality) woman." And maybe even change "woman" to her position/job/career.

Maurice Vaughan I would say it's a 2-hander, but I'm not sure how accurate that is when there end up being multple versions of the woman? lol The guy is an inventor who wants revenge on her for not giving him the grant he was going after to workon his time travel invention, forcing him to give up everything (house, wife/kid, life) to pursue it alone - and now he's using the machine to kidnap the woman (and other versions of her along the timeline) and torture and/or kill her/them.

It's essentially a single-location torture porn (like SAW or HOSTEL) with a sci-fi twist.

That's really unique, Travis Seppala!

It sounds like the woman in the logline is the main character.

Maybe something like: After waking up trapped in a room-sized time machine, a selfish lawyer fights to survive against the vengeful inventor who uses the machine to kidnap multiple versions of her and torture them to death.

Or this: A selfish lawyer tries to escape a room-sized time machine invented by a vengeful madman who uses it to kidnap multiple versions of her and torture them to death.

She might not be a selfish lawyer though.

Maurice Vaughan

1) Do you know if there's a way to edit the logline I've posted? I don't see an edit button anywhere. OR do I need to delete it and post a whole new one?

2) how's: Finding herself tied and gagged in a room-sized time machine, a woman must survive a madman inventor who's willing to torture, murder, and manipulate time to get revenge on her for ruining his life.

A madman inventor forges a Time Machine, inside is a person unconscious.

let's not focus too much implication because it might all change anyways

You can edit your logline from your Logline homepage, Travis Seppala. Click the green button to the right of the page. You can also edit a logline by going to your Logline homepage, clicking the logline's picture, clicking the downward arrow to the right of the page, and selecting "Edit Post" in the dropdown menu.

I like that logline. I'm not sure about "Finding herself tied and gagged in a room-sized time machine" though. Maybe "Trapped in a room-sized time machine." Unless "tied and gagged" are important to the story.

Vincent Turner 1) Your version 100% makes the inventor the lead, and seems to just have a random unconcious person inside his machine. lol

2) Not sure I understand your point of "let's not focus too much on implication"?

Maurice Vaughan I mean, other than when she briefly escapes, she spends the whole movie tied up.

Ok, how about starting the logline with "Tied and gagged in a room-sized time machine," Travis Seppala?

Maurice Vaughan So...

Tied and gagged in a room-sized time machine, a woman must survive a madman inventor who's willing to torture, murder, and manipulate time to get revenge on her for ruining his life.

Yep, Travis Seppala.

Maurice Vaughan Updated. Thanks!

You're welcome, Travis Seppala.

A very interesting, creative story: "Held captive in a time machine, a woman fights to survive and escape a vengeful madman who tortures and kills her through several time loops".