Nassoro Chakujela's Lounge Discussions

Everybody has been posting a logline here for comment. However, before going there, I think it will useful to review an excellent article/tutorial on this site about loglines and synopses. The only problem is that I don't know where to locate it. Can anyone help?

Greetings. I just received notice from a literary agency regarding one of my screenplay shorts. They informed me my format was incorrect. Specifically the use of 'More' & 'Continued', which in their words, is making my screenplay look amateurish. I'm using Final Draft 9. The 'Mores' & 'Continueds' are automatically inserted via Final Draft at the end of pages, and when the same character speaks again. I am not adding them! I have studied screenwriting in school, read tons of screenplays and screenplay books. But maybe the industry standard is changing? Are those features in FD 9 able to be turned off? By the way, this literary agency has offered to show me where I'm making errors for $450.00.

SYNOPSIS: Special Mossad Agent under mission, turns rogue and assassinates Israel Prime Minister in public as his last leverage to infiltrate into Iran's Nuclear Development Team and take down their nuclear weapons projects. The story is about White Mossad Agent, Gavri Isaac who’s assigned to infiltrate into Iran’s nuclear development team and take down their nuclear weapons facility. To make things happen, Gavri uses an Arab woman, Salha Ahmed who’s also CIA Undercover Agent to reach Colonel Abdul, Hamas Commander. With the objective to win enemies’ trusts, Gavri constantly leaks a number of framed and fabricated Israel military intel to Hamas and Iran through Salha. These intel always prove to be credible to the point he turns to be their accomplice and most trusted source of intel. One of the most successful relationships between Gavri and Iran is a non-framed intel that saves the life of Iranian nuclear scientist. And through Gavri’s well framed deception and manipulation, Iran’s secret service finally realizes that Gavri is not a white Jew but an Arab Egyptian who looks White due to Plastic Surgery done by his surgeon parents who’re also in CIA’s Watch list. However, infiltrating in the nuclear team is just the beginning of the whole suicide mission.

My name is Nassoro Chakujela, an aspiring screenwriter from Dar es salaam, Tanzania. You wanna know more about Tanzania? This's beautiful East African country, the land of Kilimanjaro, Zanzibar and Serengeti-the best place ever happened in the world history especially when you talk of wildlife and other tourism destinations. It's best place even for Film Makers...find yourself: http://www.tanzaniaparks.com/ Nassoro Chakujela is aspiring screenwriter, currently with one script in the market. The Script title is THE REVIVED MISSION. LOGLINE: Two powerful secret service agencies, MOSSAD and CIA gather their resources together to bring down Iran’s nuclear projects by infiltrating a White Jew Mossad Agent into Iran’s Nuclear Development Team. You can read the Logline, Synopsis and the part of the screenplay at Loglines/Screenplays sections posted on my page. Likewise, the full script can be accessed at www.inktip.com. In addition to that, am available for paying works, whether writing from the scratch or otherwise.