1 - Nice way to introduce Angie. She's a very troubled woman. I like the description of the "grotesque mask" 2 - I think the description for the small workshop could be shaved a bit. And "Everything has ITS place." 2 -The dog scene definitely has my attention. :) 3 - "The collar goes the same way as everything else" - I had to read that a couple of times to realize she put the collar inside the dog with the rest of the stuff. 3 - "Bloody pinata" - Very nice. 5 - I don't get her one word sentences. I'm not sure if they're necessary. Ah, so she killed the woman "Roxy" too. Why was the dog named after his mistress? That seems odd. But hey, that's him. I wish there was a bigger motive to kill the dog and the step-mom. I didn't see the reason for the step-mom to be there. I think we should open with her and establish that she's a nuisance, and then Angie goes upstairs and chugs the pills like a beer bottle (Nice description) For the dog, maybe if the mistress gave him the dog? Then it's more of an object she has to get rid of, rather than a loving animal. The actions got a little wordy, but overall the script was pretty solid. I think it would make a great short for a horror/dark-comedy director to film. Nice job, Anthony.

Thanks Jean-Pierre, some great notes, will work some of these into a new draft. Thanks for the read. Anthony

Too grisly for my personal taste, but well-written.

Thanks Ardua, it is a little grim.

After reading Furtive Response, I expected a more subtle way of evening the score, somehow more empowering :o) Sorry, Anthony, I feel the grisly details belong more to the horror genre than drama. I enjoyed JP's feedback.

Thanks for checking it out Annie, and yes definitely has horror elements, and is very different to Furtive Response... I wanted to have her feeling of total loss result in something catostrophic, something as extreme as the betrayal she feels...