I like this one. Its good.

Thank you Leo. Nice to hear from you.

I like this! :D

Great you like it! I need more suggestions on its improvement.

I am curious- what market do you imagine for this screenplay?

I really like this one, it would some cleaver and interesting filming. x

I like it... I would cut out the first part of the logline giving: "A writer finds himself lost between reality and a dream world where he is forced to face his darkest secrets"

Thanks a lot Rayne!!

Hi Sarah, Rayne, Aarathi and Oriel.. now take a look at this... I just changed the Logline.

I love this diary/dream concept. very original.

Thanks Rachel!

I like this logline which sounds very intriquing

This hits at the core conflict between the dream and the dreamer: their very meaning. If you watch Kurosawa's DREAMS, most of them grapple with the anxieties and traumas of post-war japan. I think that this film would be more bankable if we knew the trauma behind the bulk of the dreams so as to frame the dream vignettes.

Hm.. I don't like the "reflecting on his own notes", sounds a bit childish to me... Also "the diary of dreams" has a magical ring to it, I don't know if you intended that? I would probably write something along the lines of : "Struggling to make sense of his increasingly strange dreams, a famous writer uncovers a dark secret in the diary he keeps."

Hi Zach and Arnaud, my Script is not big.. it's a small, Short film Script, only 20 pages. And it is also uploaded along with the Loglines. I kindly request you if you could read it. Actually, I have had too many opinions on this Logline. After reading this script, I think you may be accurately tell the Logline for it.

Here is the new one, I think now it is suited to the script.

I like this one a lot - deep and psychological

Is the conflict with himself only? Or is there someone else he will be going up against?

You're not understanding the concept behind writing a logline. You really need to do some research. Here's an example: In present day Mumbai, a dark, prescient dream reveals why a writer has writer's block, now he must delve into the real world of sex and drugs to discover the truth behind his dreams. A logline has a WHO (writer), a WHAT (dream), a WHEN (today), a WHERE (Mumbai), a HOW (taking action by delving into sex and drugs), and a WHY (to solve the problem of his writer's block. It also must show his absolute need to act, or else there is no movie. Grammar is very important if you're making an English-speaking film. Have a native speaker iron out any problems before you submit.

Thanks a lot Stuart, will do that!

Hey Warden keep writing. You are doing great. I saw some notes from masters that I had saved. LOGLINE = Longline is the miniaturization of the idea. The logline’s job is to give an immediate sense of the story and make us want more. A successful logline takes a story full of big ideas and complex plotlines and breaks them down into a simple sentence that can be quickly and easily understood. . Strong loglines contain action and a sense of excitement. Often stating the character’s goal can be the way to convey the story concept. . The characters, the world and the main conflict should be vivid in a good logline. . Longline is a one-or-two-sentence summary of your movie that immediately conveys its premise, appeal, and unique twist. . To write a logline for a dramatic story … Identify the true emotion of the story, tell it honestly, and capture its emotional punch in your logline. Hope they help. They are from the book Cut To The Chase and ScreenPlay by Zed Field. Best of luck.

Many thanks Beezhan, nice to hear from you.

day dreaming or night dreaming?

i kindda know what the writer is going thru---i do have personal, literal experience several times where i get confused which of my memories was real and which one was from a dream. I've had people question me about the stuff i tell them of which they have no clue. To me the story is relatable and unique at the same time and im sure a number experience such confusion. Though---it is still a bit too vague(if that's the right word) for me perhaps a bit more details on what is going on in those dreams and reason behind as to why these dreams are consuming him as a being.

Many thanks to Johan and Choi. Love you guys!

It's a good log line, But you can reword stuff to hook people, talk about more about the plot twists and turns. What happens when he confronts these dreams? Does he go to therapy? I think that your like the writer John carpenter. What happens to the writer? Does he find some therapy in his dreams, Must he remember a traumatic event? Does he go mad from it?

It looks great. I like this kind of movie, which makes the viewer keep thinking about it after the movie ends. Well done.