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Based on a true story. A retired hitman, the godson of Bugsy Seigel, gets a call about an unfinished 40-year-old contract. He must put Christ aside, get a gun, and take a cross-country trip with his bitter mother, jaded daughter, sweet granddaughter, and unwitting wife as his accomplice to complete the hit within 90 days.
SYNOPSIS:
Meet Michael Hardy in 2012 in his Section-8 San Diego apartment—he’s on oxygen, 20 meds, and uses a cane to move his 6’1” 325 body around. He’s living on disability, married five years to Theresa, and has a Doberman, his constant companions. A call in the early morning hours pulls Hardy back to his past. A contract he took in 1972 was derailed because his target was sent to prison for murder. “Lorenzo Conti’s out and you got 90 days,” says Joey Milito. This is the long plot for the 13-episode limited series.
The next morning, Hardy watches a video replay of him on a 1989 Geraldo Show on hitmen. On the show, Hardy is in disguise—hat, glasses, fake beard. After he dismisses the other guests as phonies, he tears off his disguise and looks into the camera, “This is what a real hit man looks like.” Theresa and Hardy revel in the man he used to be.
Hardy conducts a weekly Bible study in his home. He shows compassion and shares personal thoughts with down-on-their-luck neighbors, the week’s topic forgiveness.
The highlight of Hardy’s day, his daily FaceTime call with his grandkids, has them fighting over the phone—a bust.
Hardy hides his scheming from Theresa, saying he’s thinking of taking a final trip to Brooklyn—wants to show her around. They talk of ways to raise money—sell insulin, stud Chance, Theresa get a job in a nail salon. They need AKC papers for Chance to stud and go to John (who runs a 420 smoke shop) to make up some fake papers.
An altercation with a neighbor goth kid over the washers and dryers in their complex and chases him feebly around the yard with his cane has Hardy flashback to when he completed his first hit in 1970 Brooklyn.
Hardy’s daily FaceTime call catches his daughter Janice in the middle of vicious fight with her husband Rob. Hardy drives over to her home, a 3-inch survivor knife in his lap and taunts Rob to stop him from honking the horn. Hardy pulls him in and viciously stabs him with each syllable, “You-hit-my-daughter-you-piece-of-shit.”Hardy goes to a Wal-Mart to clean up all the evidence. While in the Wal-Mart bathroom, he looks at his huge face in the mirror dripping with soapy water—“I’m back.”
They head over to John’s 420 Smoke Shop where they hold hands in the dark and pray for God’s guidance.
He parks two blocks away while Theresa goes to get their apartment to get the dog and check to see if police are around. While he waits, a song on the radio causes Hardy to flashback to when he took the contract on Lorenzo Conti in 1972. Sirens snap Hardy out of the memory. He spots Theresa running toward his car with duffle bags and their dog, yelling, “Go. GO!”
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I like this logline. The story it tells. What I miss in the logline is telling me 'what is at stake' for the hitman ( if he does not complete the hit).
Not part of the rating. I would cut up your synopsis in text blocks, easier to read.
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Great story!