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When a demon from the past returns to a small town for vengeance against the townspeople, a young slave-hand must battle his inner fears to form a team to uncover a mystery to take down the demon and save his people.
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A demon, named Titus, returns from the dead to seek revenge on a town through murder and mayhem. Titus is a big problem that they don’t have an answer for. As Titus slays his way through innocent townspeople, he prepares for his coup d’état—the murder of President Abraham Lincoln. A young slave hand, Virgil, is called to action and must forsake his bigoted ways and inner insecurities and fears to lead a team of unlikely heroes to save the town…and the country. “Abolition” is more than your ordinary slave story, it’s an extraordinary story about people. It’s not about Black people—it’s about people. It’s about being humans.
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Hey, Anthony McBride. I'm a little confused by "a young slave-hand must battle his inner fears to form a team to uncover a mystery." Does he have to battle his inner fears in order to form a team, then they have to uncover the mystery, then they take down the demon to save his people?
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Maurice Vaughan He has to form a team to uncover the mystery.
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Ok, Anthony McBride. I think "a young slave-hand must battle his inner fears to form a team to uncover a mystery to take down the demon and save his people" needs to be restructured so it's clearer. You use "to" three times, and I think there are too many goals in your logline.