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THE RAFFLE
By Lisa Lee
After discovering his son has joined a deadly raffle run by the world's elite, a desperate father will do anything to rescue him before his name is drawn- including turning to its founder for help.
THE RAFFLE
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Sounds unique and thrilling, Lisa Lee. I suggest telling what the father needs help with. Example: "for help rescuing his son"
You might could add a ticking clock too if you want. Example: "for help rescuing his son before ________ (ticking clock)"
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Thanks for the advice, Maurice Vaughan!
You're welcome, Lisa Lee.
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Your logline is better, Lisa Lee, but I'm confused by how the battle part ties into the raffle.