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THE JERSEY DEVIL
By Brian Elias
A reluctant teenager, plagued by her own psychic abilities, must stop the ghost of a satanic teacher from unleashing a demon before all hell breaks loose on the town.
SYNOPSIS:
Leedsville High School in NJ has a problem; it's cursed by The Jersey Devil. Now, aided by the ghost of a satanic teacher, the devil intends to return. Rose Kerrigan, the girl with the spooky wifi, is the psychic student who’s doubly cursed. She not only despises her ability, but she’s caught glimpses into the dark halls, and deep wells of the devil’s plan. Her visions lead her to the midst of a satanic coven and to the secret underground catacombs of the town itself. Along with her friends, they simultaneously deal with demonic forces, their own jealousies, social media attacks and failed romances. Worst of all, one of her friends has been chosen to personally bring about the Jersey Devil’s rebirth. With evil poised to spring from every corner, hallway, and locker, Rose has to survive ghosts, devils, students and even her friends if she intends to stop The Jersey Devil and save the school.
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Thanks! I would've thought that was too short.
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The 300 years earlier confuses the log line. Does the protagonist travel back 300 years or was the demon released 300 years ago. What's he been up to the lazy sod!
lol... good point
I'm absorbing everything.. thank you so much for your suggestions!
"A reluctant teenager, plagued by her own psychic abilities, must stop the ghost of a satanic teacher from unleashing a demon on the school." -- Should I add "and save the town"?
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I'd look to expand on a demon on the school. "Must stop a satanic teacher from unleashing a demon into the world". We know there's a teacher so you don't really need to say school. You could say a "reluctant pupil" which would nod further to a school location.
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NICE. May I act in this?
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I like it, but it reminds me of "Carrie" for some odd reason.
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A reluctant teenager, who refuses to believe her own psychic abilities, is the only chance a rural town has against the ghost of a satanic teacher who threatens to take back the town.
I say "refuses to believe her ability" because it hints at the tension and character arc of film
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Pete's logline is OK: 'refuses to believe her own psychic abilities" shows the lead must grow. and normaly we want to see grows in the lead character. But will she? It also says we have an inactive not in controle protag who - through the logline -- does not convince me that she, by 'taking control' against all ods, will eventually get 'the upper hand. That's why using the word 'MUST' in your logline is always handy.
For me (personally) "A reluctant teenager, plagued by her own psychic abilities, must stop the ghost of a satanic teacher from unleashing a demon before all hell breaks loose on the town." is fine. If you can stay under 30 words (or end up just above) it's fine.
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