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THE DEVILS BRIDGE
By Ryan Mogensen
Retired Soldier and New Orleans native is caught in the middle of a Spiritual War of good and evil where both sides want him. One to be the vessel to bring in the apocalypse and the other to stop it.
THE DEVILS BRIDGE
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Hm. Try to add an adjective to the soldier...is he grumpy? egotistical? nefarious? exhausted? silly? The adjective for your hero is key in a logline. Also, try to situate us as to the antagonist more (aliens? angels? spirits? Gods?). Keep playing with it. Loglines are an art form unto themselves.
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Going to read the screenplay. My question right now is why do they want 'him' ? What's so valuable about him? That should be in the logline.
Thank you Sarah Gabrielle Baron, great points. I'm working on this for sure.
Rutger Oosterhoff, as you read you will read D.A. Discovers his Haitian lineage times him to a demonic contract several generations back and that demon is ready to collect but D.A. Knew nothing about it. Eager to hear feedback and it’s a first draft so it’s rough and we know we need to address some of the actions, dialogue and subtext. Any feedback is welcome.