Great title and unique concept, James Austin McCormick! I think the logline could use some work. This might help:
"After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) tries to _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes)."
Or instead of "tries to," you could use: "attempts to," "fights to," "struggles to," "strives to," "sets out to," "fights," "battles," "engages in," "participates," "competes," etc.
Great title and unique concept, James Austin McCormick! I think the logline could use some work. This might help:
"After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) tries to _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes)."
Or instead of "tries to," you could use: "attempts to," "fights to," "struggles to," "strives to," "sets out to," "fights," "battles," "engages in," "participates," "competes," etc.
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